Cleaning Up the Mess

#writersofinstagram #writing #writer #iwrite #lifeofawriter #writerslife #author #authorsofinstagram #quote #inspirationalquoteoftheday #motivation #amreading #booklover #bookstagram #books #booklove #bookishIn a previous post, I offered a list of rules to follow to finish your first draft. Now that you have completed your draft, it’s time to clean up the mess.

As I stated previously, your draft is going to be messy. It’s going to need revisions. You’ll need to smooth out transitions, make grammar corrections, and deepen content. The revising and editing process can be daunting for some, but I’ve learned a few things over the years that have made the whole editing and revising process a little less painful.

Take a break. It’s a good idea to step away from the manuscript for a few days or even weeks before you jump into revising and editing. Work on another project. Take a vacation. Finish the to-do list that’s been hanging on your refrigerator for the last three months. Then, when you’re ready to revise and edit, you’ll see your manuscript with fresh eyes.

Get Organized.  Clean off your desk and give yourself a comfortable space to work. Get all research finished before you start revisions, and organize all your notes. Have any grammar or reference books you might need within easy reach.

Clear your calendar. Tell your family and friends you’re busy, clear your calendar, and designate time to get the revisions done. Prepare meals ahead of time and freeze them. Hire a dogsitter. Send the kids to Grandma’s house. Do whatever you have to do to free up time.

Set a goal. Decide on a page count goal and stick to it. Don’t stop until you’re done.

Read and take notes. Read all the way through the entire manuscript once and make notes. Make a list of questions that need to be answered and scenes you need to add. Jot down places where you need to add more details. Decide where chapter breaks need to be. Stay connected to the story.

Take one bite at a time. Once you’ve read through the entire manuscript, break it into 20 or 30 page chunks. Focus only on these pages and look for specific things.

Play nice. Only let your internal editor come out if he/she promises to play nice. It’s ok to be critical of your work, but don’t change things so much that you lose your voice as a writer. Your voice makes you who you are.

Things to look for when revising and editing:

  • Include the senses in every scene. Include details, but not excessive details. Leave room for the imagination.
  • Make sure the plot makes sense. Every scene should move the story forward. Kill the fancy sentences that don’t move the plot along. Refer back to your storyboard if necessary.I have felt like this before. Many times.
  • Keep your Point of View consistent throughout.
  • Create believable tension on every page. Your characters should have goals and motivation, but there should be conflict that keeps them from achieving their goal. Keep their goal just out of reach until the very end. The reader has to want to continue the journey to see what happens.
  • Prompts and hooks. Hook readers with the opening lines. Leave a chapter with a question. Make the reader want to know what’s going to happen next.
  • Make your dialogue real. Eliminate small talk. Characters should speak their personality, gender, and age. There is nothing wrong with he said, she said, but use action tags or beats if you can.
  • Balance dialogue, introspection, and action.
  • Look for cliches.
  • Ditch the backstory. Give the reader the tip of the iceberg by weaving in small bits of information. Let them wonder about the rest.
  • Reveal character quirks and ticks.
  • Make sure you don’t have too many story threads. All threads should lead back to the main trail.
  • Create a balance between long sentences and shorter ones. See the example below.Great example of why students should vary sentence structure.
  • Tighten word choice. Eliminate filler words and use strong action verbs. Check for redundancy. Avoid flowery writing.
  • Create smooth transitions.
  • Edit for grammar, spelling, punctuation, and verb tense. Many sources suggest reading through your manuscript backwards to catch grammar and spelling mistakes you might otherwise overlook. And reading out loud allows you to hear errors you might not see through reading.

Once you’ve cleaned up the mess, let the book sit for at least a week before you read through 'it is perfectly okay  to write garbage -- as long as you edit brilliantly." - C.J. Cherryh #NaNoWriMo #writingit one more time. Then hand it to a critique partner who can give you constructive feedback.

Everyone has their own style when it comes to revising and editing. Some writers are very systematic, others are more relaxed about the process. Do whatever works for you. When I revise and edit, I end up reading through my manuscript multiple times. I concentrate on something different every time. My first read might focus on dialogue. The next time I read through it, I might add details or delete unnecessary scenes and sentences. There is no right or wrong way to clean up your writing. It’s simply a matter of preference. Be true to yourself. Otherwise you'll never feel fulfilled or satisfied with what you produce.

Keep It Simple

Keeping it simple, imagine that. I find it funny that when we teach writing in schools, we do everything but this. We give kids lists of alternative, flowery words and phrases to use, we provide them with other words for ‘said’, and teach them the proper use of adverbs. Yet in the real writing world, the world of editors and agents and publication companies, all of this is frowned upon.

This article sums up “keep it simple” quite nicely. Enjoy!

Writing your first novel-Things you should know

fewer-wordsWhenever you write, you should aim for maximum simplicity. You want tight writing with no redundancies, flowery language, or longer than necessary words. Shun pretentious writing. It exposes your inexperience.

I borrowed the following example from a class I am taking through Udemy. It does a great job of showing what I am trying to explain. If you haven’t checked Udemy out, I would highly recommend their classes. They are informative, interesting, and very easy to follow, and are a fraction of the cost of most sites I’ve visited. Now back to my blog and the example 🙂

The specific point I am trying to make is that the colors red and gray go well together.

The point I am trying to make is that the colors red and gray go well together.

My point is that the colors red and gray go well together.

The colors red and gray…

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Author Confessions Round 6

Day seven of author confessions- What word do you use way too much?

This question makes me laugh because I have many words I use too often–looked, wp-1484512647273.jpglaughed, smiled. When I write a draft, the main purpose is to get the story on paper. Revising and editing, along with the many writing resources I own, clean up the writing and allow me to insert or change words and phrases into something more descriptive and fluid. That stage takes a long time only because I try to express character actions and feelings in creative ways without using unnecessary vocabulary or losing my unique writing voice.

Edit Without Mercy

The writing process consists of many stages.  According to most Language Arts and Writing curriculum experts these stages include pre-writing, drafting, revising, editing, and publication.  (On a side note, I want to add that these stages aren’t alwayswriting-process linear and are often repeated multiple times within a single manuscript.)  My least favorite of these stages is editing/ revising, not because I have issues with grammar or sentence structure, but because it’s time consuming and forces me to drink too much caffeine.  Although I detest revising and editing, I want to focus on that stage of the writing process today.

I’m currently in the process of revising and editing my second book.  If I survive this process without losing all my hair I will be pleasantly surprised.

I want to start off with a personal disclaimer based on my experience as both a teacher and a writer.  Everything we were taught and still teach kids about writing does not apply to the real world of fiction.  Every English teacher is cringing as I say that.  The classic “said is dead”.  The five sentence paragraph.  Every sentence must have a subject and predicate.  Story boards and planning sheets.  Topic sentence and supporting details.  All of those strategies and techniques are great if the only thing you ever plan to write in your life is a research paper.  For fiction, the rules don’t always apply.

Over the years I’ve read tons of advice about writing, and listened to only a fraction of it.  I’m the kind of person who tends to take advice from people who have walked in my shoes.  When it comes to writing, I’m going to listen to people who are successful in the business.  I’ve read several books about the craft of writing.  Among my favorites are Chuck Wendig’s The Kick-Ass Writer, Stephen King’s On Writing, and Self-Editing for Fiction Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King.  Stephen King mentions another one called The Elements of Style written by William Strunk Jr. and E.B. White.  I have not read this one yet, but it is the next writing book on my “to read” list.

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These books were written by experts in the field and offer tons of advice about the craft of writing.  If you haven’t read them, I highly recommend that you do.

87ed09d60142a9bd380bb3054a3a7301Stephen King said it best.  Write with the door closed, rewrite with the door open.  What he meant by that was your first draft should be written to get the story out there.  Close the door to eliminate distractions and just write.  When you revise and edit, you’re clarifying meaning for your reader, smoothing out details, opening the door for them.

First drafts are crap.  Every writer will tell you that.  We all write chapters we don’t want published, but that’s what revising and editing is for.  When you are ready to re-read your manuscript and trudge through the revising and editing process, please keep one thing in mind: the worst thing you wrote is better than the best thing you didn’t write.

Let’s start by clarifying the difference between revising and editing.  Revising is adding/removing words, sentences, or paragraphs, changing a word or placement of a word (or entire chapter), and substituting words or sentences for new ones.  Editing involves capitalization, sentence structure, spelling, and punctuation.

Now that that’s been clarified, we can get down to business.  I am not a writing expert and in no way do I claim to be.  But I have learned a few things from the experts, and from personal experience, that I think are worth sharing.

1.  Said is not dead.  Back in Elementary School, Middle School, and High School we were all given extensive lists of alternative words for said.  The funny thing about that is in the world of fiction writing, editors want you to use said.  In On Writing, Stephen King even recommends he said, she said.  Nothing more.  Go figure.

2. Avoid dialogue tags.  This is where the phrase said is dead would apply.  Don’t write “Let’s go to the park,” Billy said.  Instead use a beat.  Here’s an example.  Billy picked up his basketball and held it under his arm.  “Let’s go to the park.”  This shows action, and based on that action, I know Billy is the one speaking.  Use of a dialogue tag may sometimes be necessary to clarify who is speaking, but when you use one, stick with said.

3. Read dialogue out loud.  Does it sound genuine?  Does it sound like something your character would say?  If your character is a surfer, does he or she speak in surfer slang?  Each character has his or her own voice.  The words that come out of your character’s mouth should reflect that voice.

4. Avoid as and -ingExample:  As I walked down the street, I saw a dog with a bone between his pawsWalking down the street, I saw a dog with a bone between his paws.  Stephen King suggests you do neither of the above.  Instead get to the point and simply say,  I walked down the street and saw a dog with a bone between his paws.  He’s written and sold countless best selling novels.  Might not be a bad idea to consider his advice.

5.  Along the same lines, cut the fluff.  Don’t try to fancy up your writing with big words your reader won’t understand.  The purpose of fiction is to tell a story, not to show off your extensive vocabulary.  Use the first word that comes to mind.  If you later think of a word that better describes what you want to say, then by all means change it.  As the writer you have every right to change, add, and delete all you want.  But usually your first instinct is the best.

6. Grammar.   You don’t have to be a grammar Nazi, and language doesn’t always have to be dressed in a suit and tie.  In fact, sometimes grammatically proper sentences can stiffen a line.  It’s ok to use fragments and omit a comma if you want the line to be read without a pause.  It’s ok to have a one word paragraph.  Really.  It is.  But you need to know enough about grammar to sound intelligent.

7. Go with the flow.   Your story telling should be smooth, not choppy.  When you re-read, listen to the beat.  Can you hear the rhythm?

8.  Proportion.  Vary sentence length.  Alternate between narrative and dialogue.  Write intense action then give your reader some time to breath with a more relaxed scene before you move into action again.aee53c508b8555aa7d7fa06f5aee40d5

9.  Show, don’t tell.   Let your characters tell the story through their actions and dialogue.  Don’t tell me Mary is sad.  Show me her glossy eyes and quivering lip.  Let me hear her sobs and feel her tear-soaked shirt sleeve.  Give your reader details, but not so many that you flood the story and disturb the flow.  Show only what your characters see.  Let the reader imagine the rest.

10.  To steal a quote from Stephen King, The road to hell is paved with adverbs.  He didn’t run quickly, he sprinted.  The use of adverbs means you didn’t choose the right verb.  Find a stronger verb.  Not a fluffy one, just a stronger one.

df98c6b936ecfa537d367b6571ed209111.  If you don’t need it, cut it.  Stay on target.  If a line, sentence, paragraph, scene, or chapter doesn’t move the story forward, get rid of it.  Cut unnecessary characters.  Cut unneeded dialogue.  Revising and editing will not kill you.  It may kill some of your characters, but it won’t kill you.

Revising and editing is painstakingly time consuming and often frustrating.  You slaved for months to write this manuscript and putting it on the chopping block is hard.  Believe me, I know.  But if you take the time to revise and edit without mercy, your writing will reap the benefits.

I want to close with one last remark.  Find your voice.  Attempting to copy another writer is fake and often forced.  You have a voice and you have a style all your own.  Find it, use it, refine it.  It’s your story.  Don’t let anyone else hold the pen.

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